What this is for

I'll be using this to post content from my Horror critique screenplay, Le Kaärpe (The Carp) here, as well as random other things that I feel like putting up. For now, Part I:

Le Kaärpe
(The Carp)

a screenplay

Characters:
Young Couple - A young, happy couple in the first scene. Nothing particularly interesting about either.
Mike - Car driving youth. Athletic, dark hair. He's dating Diana. He has a distinguishing mark on one of his ears. Best friends with Kyle.
Diana - Pretty heroine. Self-obsessed and brunette, tries in vain to keep her narcisism low-key. Dates Mike, but secretly would rather be with Kyle.
Kyle - The typical "nice guy." Brown hair, an ex-boyscout. He notices Dana's interest but could never imagine hurting Mike, his best friend since grade-school.
Samantha (Sam) - Kyle's younger sister and Diana's good friend. Fun-loving and kind of a slut with self-proclaimed bad taste in men. Dates Johnny.
Johnny - Comic relief. Thinks that he's god's gift to women. Dates Sam. Pretend's to smoke, but hides the fact that he's been smoking methols.
Old Asian Guy - The group's mentor as far as things Carp. Obsessed with lemons and generally unintelligiable
Corey Hart aka The Carp Magnum - Singer and songwriter that formed the small village Hearthville. Leader of the group of Carp worshippers called Karp ADM.
The Karp ADM - A group of Carp worshippers. All full members assume the name Cory. Bound by the document Magna Carpa.

Scenes:
Mike's car - Mike's car, used only for a few scenes. small, but manageable for five people.
The Pond - A very small pond with a dock. near a cabin with a gravel road leading only to the pond. Where the Carp lurk, menacingly below the surface.
The Cabin - A small wood cabin rented by the five youth. Near the pond.
Hearthville - The small burgh established by Corey Hart. Mostly a gas-station, diner and convenience store.
Gas-station - small family run gas station. Attendent is named Cory.
Convenience Store - Owned by old asian man. Not very well stocked.
Diner - Not much more than a truck stop. A town hang-out.

Opening
The scene opens to the pond, with low menacing music and low sound that gets louder as the scene progresses.
The Young couple are there; the girl is swimming and the guy getting ready to jump in when the
scene begins. He jumps in the water with major procession, splashing the girl. they embrace,
but the camera isn't close enough to see every detail of this embrace. They start to splash and
flirt with each other, then the guy suddenly dives under water. The girl starts to swim around, laughing at first,
then more frantically, searching and telling her boyfriend just how little humor she sees in the situation.
At this point, bubbles and blood suddenly surface, along with a pair of ears. She starts to scream, and
quickly gets back to shore, continuing to scream even as the sound cuts out and the opening theme
begins to play. the title rolls.

Scene 1: A close call
The scene opens just after the title, with Mike driving, Diana in the passengers seat and Kyle, Johnny and Sam in the back.
Kyle has what looks like a map, and Mike keeps putting his hand on Diana's leg, even as she pushes it away.

Mike: Kyle, man, are you sure that you're reading it right?
Kyle: Yeah, of course, it says the place is just ahead on the left.
Diana: (looking at Kyle) You don't have to keep taking his crap, Kyle.
Mike: Hey, watch it, babe! I might just get jealous.

Mike tries to kiss Diana and the car swerves. She pushes him away.

Diana: Keep your eyes on the road, jackass!
Mike: (to noone in particular) She just loves to tease me!
Diana rolls her eyea and starts to apply makeup
Johnny: So what kind of place is this anyways, Mike? we're really in the boonies, I mean at that last gas station they had a dead animal skull for a gas nozzle!
Sam: (smiling) Oh Johnny, stop!
Mike: I dunno, ask Kyle, it's his deal.
Sam: (reaching for the map) Yeah, Kyle, where is this place anyways?

Kyle puts up some resistance, and some wrestling takes place, but he was caught off guard and his younger sister gets the "map."

Sam: Jesus Christ, this thing's blank! Kyle, what the hell?!
Kyle: Hey, calm down, I know where it is. Look, I'm renting the cabin from this guy I know, it should be alright.
Mike: (turning around) Shit, man! Look, I've known you for forever, but you've never pulled this shit on me before! (Continues yelling)

As Mike yells, a large truck comes out of nowhere and narrowly avoids Mike's car. Mike pulls over to the side of the road, and for a moment nothing's said by anyone.
The camera pans to a driveway across the road from Mike's car.

Kyle: (suddenly and excitedly pointing) Hey, look, there it is!
Diana: (skeptically) THIS is the place?
Johnny: God I need a smoke.

End of Scene

More on this later, hope you enjoyed it.